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Comment on Untitled (Any Suggestions?) by Dante Mottillo

Dante Mottillo — Mon, 07 Jun 2010 21:26:39 +0000

The best poetry makes a real impact on the people who read it; which is what this poem had to of done. Ya, after I started writing poetry and some short stories, I also had to assure my dad that I was okay and wasn’t going through some stage of depression or something. I can still see though your writing style in it, and if you reread some of your other work, this isn’t that far off, it just gives another set of emotions (which are still awsome).

Comment on Oneness by Dante Mottillo

Dante Mottillo — Mon, 07 Jun 2010 21:24:09 +0000

Thank you. I know it’s not some of my usual work, because it was for the World Harmony Run event, and I was asked to do a poem for it. Thanks though, I’m glad people like it, and reality seemed like the best way to work it.

Comment on Oneness by Yulz X Asylum

Yulz X Asylum — Mon, 07 Jun 2010 17:39:11 +0000

Wow Dante. This was unexpected from you. I had to read it a couple times to actually accept that you wrote it. I enjoyed reading it. I can tell there is quite a bit of emotion in this, and you took time for it. I enjoy seeing that you used reality and not someones fantasy to do this.

Comment on Untitled (Any Suggestions?) by Yulz X Asylum

Yulz X Asylum — Mon, 07 Jun 2010 17:35:45 +0000

Thank you Dante. I know it’s pretty dark from what I normally write. It has scared quite a few people. I had to talk to my mom and assure her that I wouldn’t kill anyone after she read it. It’s a change from my normal work and I’m happy that you enjoyed it.

Comment on Untitled (Any Suggestions?) by Dante Mottillo

Dante Mottillo — Thu, 03 Jun 2010 01:59:48 +0000

Absolutely epic. I like the imagery here, and the way that you don’t use classical transitions. It’s one of those pieces that just leaves me speechless because I have to read it over and over again. The faint installments of rhyme, and the short, constant thoughts just make the poem move along really well; it concludes perfectly with that very cynical thought. Awsome job.

Comment on Things on the left side of your chest by Dante Mottillo

Dante Mottillo — Mon, 17 May 2010 08:19:38 +0000

I see your fashioning shorter poetry now. Once again you have accomplished a great intro, but this time I feel that the emotion here isn’t finished. There must be a balance of length and magnitude of portrayal. Nonetheless, the constant annoyance of never filling this void does arouse the sense of “why is it even there in the first place?”

Comment on Whispers of Insanity by Dante Mottillo

Dante Mottillo — Thu, 13 May 2010 10:38:32 +0000

wow, after reading it over and over, this poem is absolutely amazing. Not even in a psychopathic way. The imagery, the contemplation, the immense feelings of despair and insanity is overwhelming. It’s quite awsome.

Comment on The Waiting-Revised by Erin Traynor

Erin Traynor — Fri, 16 Apr 2010 15:53:44 +0000

This is really good. I really enjoyed reading it I feel like I can really relate to it personally. It’s great.

Comment on A possible scene in the life of a Redmonder by Erin Traynor

Erin Traynor — Wed, 07 Apr 2010 22:44:38 +0000

This is really great Jaime. It kind of leaves the reader, well at least it left me, wondering and imagining her home life and her situation and just her life in general in relation to mine. It’s really amazing and I agree with Mr.Stidham that you should develop it further

Comment on Goodbye by Nina Clapperton

Nina Clapperton — Tue, 06 Apr 2010 00:20:29 +0000

You are very right, it is extremely loosely based on the episode. The show just got me started on thinking about
I’ll work on the flow.
I work well with emotion, and when I’m happy I try to fit it into my novel. So sorrow gets into my poems I guess.
Thanks so much for your comment!