Drip
Drip
Drip
Drop.
Splash.
A raindrop falls.
Mind
Heart
Soul
Falls.
Crash.
They all implode.
Want
Wish
Dream
Fails.
Gone.
I can’t prevail.
Space
Life
Time
Moves
On.
Forever ends now.
Inspired by thinking about the rain. Short, sweet and to the point. Please tell me what you think.
Superb imagery used here. Two things really stuck out at me when I read this.
1. The Constant static flow creates moments (although short) to think about what is being said. It actually allows for a very nice transition between thoughts, and how you connect the ideas of a reaindrop falling, and how things move on.
2. I really liked the usage of rain as a metaphor of life moving on. I even think that we can be seen as the individual rain droplets falling. Even when we hit the lowest point in our lives, we may feel like we’ve “imploded”, but we still continue through our cycle of life ‘evaporating’ back into our safe haven only to fall back down again. Although there have been many metaphors about this cycle that we follow, I like the way that you portrayed this one.
Conclusively, this really is straight to the point, and it is admirable that you can express such feelings and emotion with very few words. Great job